brockr23
Chandler, AZ
age: 33
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Desire
This is me
Seeing you
Soft green eyes
Longing
For the touch
The kiss
Another few moments.
This is me
Wanting you
Hard, pounding heart
Begging
For one more night
For the spark
The sigh
Another tender embrace.
This is me
Craving you
Gentle, Light hands
Reaching
For one more touch
For the caress
The chill
Another foot deeper.
This is me.
~Brett
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raen
Sunman, IN
age: 39
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i love it brett...........hmmmmmmmmmm that is one i may borrow and write down...it has inspired me!!! I am in one of those moods today..........i love ur writings as always
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brockr23
Chandler, AZ
age: 33
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Thanks.
Every now and again I have a brief moment of tenderness.
It's gone now.
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matanga79
San Antonio, TX
age: 36
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Nice!
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miralysa
Converse, TX
age: 44
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Thanks.
Every now and again I have a brief moment of tenderness.
It's gone now.
You have a gift of writing Brett. Love it.
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pankywitz
Posen, IL
age: 20
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Great poem. Only thing is I think it would be better if you put stanza breaks before each "This is me"
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brockr23
Chandler, AZ
age: 33
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I appreciate the structure tip, however, it was not written with the intent of it being read with pauses of that nature. In truth, the only intended pause in the writing is at the end.
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shiba24
Fair Lawn, NJ
age: 38
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annigma3
Madison, WI
age: 35
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Whoever was the basis for the feelings written about in this poem is or was lucky at some point. Another good poem, bro.
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stroker4u
Leesburg, FL
age: 48
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Very intense brett
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chrissie_m
Salem, OR
age: 23
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I got chills....
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