cueking4u
East Orange, NJ
age: 28
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Please let me know what ya think
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nedja
Laurel Hill, FL
age: 24
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I think you just need to do a bit of re-wording. Combine some sentences. EX: She has to be sexy but not just to me she has to know she's sexy and that doesn't mean she has to be a model because true sex appeal is not about the look at all. It's about the behavior.
I like a women who knows she is sexy and has the right attitude. True sex appeal is not about the look at all; It's about the behavior.
Short, sweet and direct. Also Not so many references to sex, pick some other personality trait you like to emphasize. I love your poem . I hope you don't want to .
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cueking4u
East Orange, NJ
age: 28
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thank u for the feed back much appreciated
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