cocobrn36
Wickliffe, OH
age: 37
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I'd like someone the review my profile please.
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ron10000
Brighton, MI
age: 63
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I am sure you will get a lot of interest, you are very good looking!!
A couple of things you should do. Break your profile into paragraphs for ease of reading. Run it through spell and grammar check for the same reason plus it makes you look more intelligent.
Add more interests. Those that can be done as a couple are best.
If we were close in distance and age, you would get a note from me.
All the best
Ron
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cocobrn36
Wickliffe, OH
age: 37
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haha. THAnks Ron for your reply. I appreciate your input.
Shay
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terbear1234
Kent, WA
age: 34
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You say you hate both Democrats and Republicans. At first glance, I read that as you hate anyone who is either. It's a very negative statement.
Do you have your daughter full-time, or does she ever go see another parent?
Be sure to put spaces after a period.
Try to start fewer of your sentences with “I”--it becomes monotonous. Instead of “I enjoy life, travel, museums, plays, and weekend road trips,” try something more like “Life, travel, museums, plays, and weekend road trips bring me joy.” Better yet, tell us about your favorite road trip, museum, or play and why you liked it best.
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mandm1969
Barberton, OH
age: 40
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Hey there-
I think you did a "great" job on your profile. Drop me a line anytime if you would to o.k!
[Edited 5/31/2010 8:43:33 PM ]
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shawnee_b
Monson, ME
age: 55
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Well Ron hit it. Very pretty. Nice pictures, with a smile too.
Try to reword sentences without starting in "I" Very easy, "my ideal man would be able to commit, communicate, debate then drop it and kiss me, love children, strong, confident, successful .." Just an example, use your words.
Space separate thoughts and with double space. 1st section about you and your likes, passions and 2nd about what you want in a man.
Politics? If you are a liberal, you are a Democrat. It's contradictory, "hate" democrats and republicans" negative, hate is a strong word. Drop the whole thing and just check moderate or leave liberal on the menu. Moderate is good, nothing to excess.
Colors on the background and text contrast are harder to read but not as bad as some I have seen. Good luck, Shawn
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